Keep it simple!
Training to be a broadcast journalist is a bit like being taught a new language. When it comes to writing, you have to ignore all those rules you learned at school and university and the result is something between C++ and poetry.
One of the golden rules hammered into us is to keep things simple. And keep. Your sentences. Short. Listeners and viewers can only take in a news report once. Even in the impending “on-demand” world, they’ll only want to take it in once.
So if you turn on the TV and radio you usually hear short sharp conversational sentences with all the fluff removed.
Admittedly, Channel 4 News tries to be different. It aims to be a bit more creative, but from what I gathered from chief writer Felicity Spector when she came into City a few weeks ago, it still has to be concise.
So, what on earth is this all about?
It’s a report on the Chinese president’s visit to Africa this week, by the usually excellent Faisal Islam: ex City student and Channel 4 News‘ business correspondent. It’s an interesting piece, but check out Faisal’s first line (watch it here):
“The Chinese presidents twelve day tour takes in eight nations including Sudan the most controversial of the host countries where Chinas unconditional aid policy has angered western governments many of whom say Beijing should use its economic weight to end hostilities in Darfur.”
It’s 43 words long. That’s nearly twice the recommended length of any sentence for broadcast. It could be broken down into no less than four separate sentences:
“It’s a breakneck tour for China’s president: eight countries in a dozen days.
But Hu Jintao’s been criticised for visiting Sudan.
Western leaders want Beijing to use its economic muscle to end violence in Darfur.
Instead in its eagerness for ties with Africa China’s giving aid freely.”
Admittedly that’s not great either. But I think it’s easier to understand, and a bit more conversational.
But it goes to show that even with the best journos working for the best stations, the basic rules sometimes still get broken.